WALT unpack sentences faster.
Every week I will be posting something from our Reading tasks. This week we have to post about the task we did. We had to choose one of the Synthesis questions. I chose 7. For that task I had to write a paragraph about what I think Big Daddy's point of view. The book that we were reading this week was The Big Jump. I wrote a paragraph of Big Daddy's point of view.
Here is my paragraph:
It was so high. I could see the classes. But what I was really worried about was hitting the pole at the end. I knew that if I cried when I got down I wouldn't be called Big Daddy. People will call me Cry baby. Sandra tries to help but I just grunt.
The boy behind me is the only one that will know how I was scared. Sandra and the boy start strapping me again, but I didn't really care.
I went down with this guy and he got hurt bad. I told the others I had to help him come down because they asked why we took forever. I helped him up which was a thank you. He knew that was the only thank you he'll ever get.
Wednesday, 30 October 2019
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Annyong Talia, I like this paragraph. It gave me chills. Reading the story was different from reading yours. You get all the information to fit in one whole paragraph, I love that!
ReplyDeleteTweeny
Hi Tweeny, Thank you for commenting on my blog. Is there anything I need to work on?
DeleteKia ora Talia,
ReplyDeleteI like your Explanations and how you added a lot of Detail.
I never thought of adding all the characters not only one. Maybe next time you could use others words not the ones from the story.
Kia ora Manuk, I will try to not repeat the words from the story next time. Thank you for the feedback!
DeleteHi Talia
ReplyDeleteI really like how descriptive this is. Next time you could maybe describe what big daddy looks like
Hi Petelo, I will do to describe what the character looks like next time. Thanks for the Feedback!
DeleteBonjour Talia!
ReplyDeleteI really liked reading your piece of writing, and I liked how you were very descriptive when writing to. Maybe next time you could make it a bit more longer but either than that this is fantastic!
~Siale